Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Essay topics:

Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Every human being with an ambition of achieving higher living standard requires different ways to try hard to support their life. While some people choose to complete the university programs, others’ option is to start work right after high school. This essay will analyze both views and present my opinion at last.

Many people believe that working straight after graduation is much more beneficial. This is favorable due to the fact that work means steady earning, as it helps to earn money and thus reduces the financial burden of the family, especially those among low-class communities. Mark Zuckerberg, an American technology entrepreneur and philanthropist best known for co-founding and leading Facebook as its chairman and chief executive officer, also known as a college dropout, could be a justifiable example for this situation. He dropped out of school and went to work early because of financial conditions. But now, at just 34, Mark Zuckerberg is running a company used by over half a billion people worldwide and has been the subject of a Hollywood movie about his life.

Others support the view that people had tertiary education have more and better employment opportunities. The argument in favor of this is that more and more jobs require college degrees which means only those who are college graduates could have a chance to apply for a position. Google, one of the leading multinational technology companies in the world specializing in Internet-related related services and products, perfectly exemplifies this situation. Candidates apply for Google must have a professional level in technology, thus, they need to be trained in college or university before and have a certificate demonstrate their competence.

In conclusion, I am not against the fact that there are some benefits of getting a job straight after school, but it seems to me that people are more likely to be successful in their careers if they continue their studies beyond school level.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 211, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, thus, while, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1676.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2539184953 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90115526642 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636363636364 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9582012215 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.923076923 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5384615385 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46153846154 7.06120827912 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259331944565 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833315950795 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785568549144 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154017552608 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586604606772 0.056905535591 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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