It is argued that technological advances have more issues than benefits. While technology improvements can promote sedentary lifestyles, I believe that they will facilitate users in terms of education and work.
Undoubtedly, advanced technology can encourage inactive lifestyles among individuals. More specifically, the innovative technologies in computers allow users to engage in a vast majority of website platforms regarding movies, video games, and music rather than outdoor activities. According to a survey in 2020, Vietnamese students preferred playing computer games after school hours to engaging in physical activities, which results in an increase in health issues such as obesity and eye shortening.
However, technological advancements can enhance users’ experience in the following aspects. Chief of these is that the proliferation of computer-based learning courses enables learners to access lessons and materials whenever they want for a cheap fee. Those studying traditionally, however, have to attend classes at a fixed time and pay a huge sum for tuition costs, books, and school facilities every month, allowing them to save much time and money. Furthermore, technological improvements enable workers to communicate with their clients or co-workers via email in minutes, whereas it took much time to do it in a few past decades. Consequently, this allows people to increase their work performance and outcomes.
Conclusion: Although technological innovation causes many problems for modern societies, such as an increase in inactive lifestyles, I still believe it can improve education and employment. I am also convinced that individuals will benefit more if they use these advancements for their true needs.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, however, if, regarding, so, still, whereas, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1484.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.796875 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23188309804 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.67578125 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4657383336 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.666666667 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58333333333 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193284355917 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687946763478 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540195428722 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123340074986 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052566270059 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.36 12.4159519038 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.6 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.