Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many people argue that the youngsters had better be encouraged to take part in volunteer social activities during their leisure time because it can be advantageous for both them and the whole community. In my point of view, in spite of positive impacts of unpaid work in society, I maintain that we should not support this opinion.
To begin with, the idea of do unpaid community work is beneficial for adolescents and all society because of several reasons. First of all, many young people have tendency to voluntarily help the community aiming to improving social skills. This is because when joining in social activities, they are able to work and interact with many people that help to develop their communication and teamwork skills as well the ability to integrate and adapt in different social environments. Furthermore, teenager’s volunteer services enhance the humaneness in community. For instance, in 2010, the number of crimes, robberies and sexual harassments in India were eliminated after ten years by volunteer works during grade 12 in schools in this country.
On the other hand, I believe that if the young people are forced to do unpaid word, it will reduce their work performance. It is because when the work is free, there is a lack of motivation as well as efforts among volunteers. This also creates negative psychology such as antipathy for the youngsters, affecting work efficiency of social organizations. For example, many children are devastated when they interact with the deprived segment of the society and sometimes this leads to serious cognitive issues like depression and phobia of meeting new people.
To sum up, although unpaid community service is a considerable act, teenagers should not be forced to engage in it until they are ready because it can exposes them to have a negative view of real society. Therefore, it is advisable that besides social work, the young people should participate in other activities to help them develop holistically.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 152, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'expose'
Suggestion: expose
... it until they are ready because it can exposes them to have a negative view of real so...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, such as, as well as, first of all, in spite of, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16666666667 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83962023389 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549382716049 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6907235823 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.769230769 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9230769231 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.6923076923 7.06120827912 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283583132838 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0976947089449 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511988554556 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171241848394 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0119191055594 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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