Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports for younger children)
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
With the improvement of quality in teaching methods and educational syllabus, opinions have been divided on whether or not students at high schools have volunteer activities as a compulsory part in their programmes. In my perspective, I am of the opinion that studying together with participating community service without paying help youngsters to develop fully in many beneficial ways.
There appear to be many reasons for doing voluntary jobs for the public should be compulsorily applied to student’s studying course. First and foremost, people who do unpaid community service may generally gain much the experience, which they may not have it before. A good illustration of this is if you teaching for younger children in orphans, you would have more practical knowledge and teaching aptitudes as well as presentation skills. Besides, working for a charity opens more opportunities for students with new tasks and roles, which would possibly assist them in securing a well-paid job in the future. Moreover, it is having chances of approaching and working many people from different walks of life such as the poor or the homeless that hopefully raise more their awareness in some challenging problems and their sympathy as well as humanity. Thanks to these activities, youngsters may also have a greater sense of social responsibility, hence improving the quality of long – term benefits in the community.
Notwithstanding the benefits, there are bound to be those who doubt this proposal. It is inevitable that parents would worry about their children if you do not have enough time for learning and acquiring academic knowledge in classrooms. Additionally, having access to many people with different situations may possibly have a negative effect on the process of shaping their identities. However, it seems that teachers play an important role in managing this curriculum effectively and balancing between studying and joining community services. Furthermore, there comes a time when foster parents or guardians should not shield their children from harsh realities and should encourage them to step out of their comfort zone.
In conclusion, for the aforementioned reasons, it is clear that doing volunteer activities serving for the community is necessary for student’s course, especially in high school.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: whether
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Suggestion: may
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47922437673 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04125353633 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576177285319 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.1177919862 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.285714286 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7857142857 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303880838104 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0999387570948 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796699761775 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190206820144 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0825101920332 0.056905535591 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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