Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
A problem of modern societies is the declining level of health in the general population, leading to the divergence of opinion on some measures to tackle this worrying trend. While some people believe that installing a large number of sports facilities is the most useful solution to enhance public well-being, I am inclined to the view that there may have other better ways.
On the one hand, there appear to be some reasons for the functions of local sports centers that have a positive influence on people’s daily practices. It is undeniable that today’s sedentary lifestyle, as well as unhealthy eating habits, are more popular with the virtue of stressful working conditions. If there have some sports facilities in their local area, they may be likely to do exercise regularly because of its convenience, rather than spending much time in front of the screen every day. Furthermore, this kind of activities is suitable for people of all ages and genders, which might generally create more relaxing spaces and playgrounds that family members or neighborhoods could enjoy together.
On the other hand, there may be better ways of solving this problem. This could be explained by the fact that interest in sports is not universal and the limits of a person’s daily free time may possibly prevent them from joining some locally available sports centers. As a result, some people may consider this public exercise equipment as a simple remedy to release strain and they may not take it as part of their daily practicing habit, then the final purpose of this one fails to be obtained. Some alternatives should be taken into action such as imposing tax penalties on high-fat food products, tobacco, and alcohol, as excessive consumption of any of these makes a contribution to poor health. In addition to this solution, it can be seen that raising awareness of citizens on the drawbacks of a passive lifestyle as well as spending the public budget on organizing more free checking up health every six months for educational institutions and offices may bring many satisfactory results.
In conclusion, for the aforementioned arguments, it appears to me that exercise equipment, albeit having some benefits, maybe a narrow approach to attain the desired consequence in improving public health. People should be encouraged not only in physical activities but also in a healthier lifestyle with more support from governments in general.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: many; numerous
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Suggestion: of
..., and alcohol, as excessive consumption of any of these makes a contribution to poor heal...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, then, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, in general, kind of, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2061.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 398.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1783919598 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86322931655 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575376884422 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.6715844182 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.538461538 106.682146367 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6153846154 20.7667163134 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220699538097 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801414745118 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472711280975 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145191930888 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051112304509 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.0 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 78.4519038076 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.