Some people believe that young people should spend more time at home and less time outside the home, others disagree, discuss both views and give your opinion.

Essay topics:

Some people believe that young people should spend more time at home and less time outside the home, others disagree, discuss both views and give your opinion.

WORK:
Whether the youngsters should spend most of their time at home or outside the house has been a cause of concern to patents. Some child advocates are against the idea, while others support it. I agree with the later opinion, as this essay will discuss good behavior as one of the benefits children form when they spend quality time at home.

Adolescents often times desire to be free from parental guidance in terms of what they do outside home. Many engage with peers in social vices, which in turn has affected their moral behaviours. To illustrate, my cousin Daniel, a 12year old boy, prefers the company of his friends whenever his parents are not around. This has made him to develop carefree attitude towards his studies. Also, it has affected his performance in school. Had it been the young school spent most of his time at home studying even when the parents are away, he would have come out with good grades from school.

On the other hand, when a growing child spends most of his time at home, he is most likely to be well mannered because he will be taught good behaviors. This will propel the child to become a better person in future. For instance, I was taught by my parents during my early life to always be in the house. Initially it was boring because i wanted to play with friends. I later learnt how to cook and assist my mother with house chores. Today even as an adult, cooking is one of my hobbies. This has made me a better person, in that i do help my wife with domestic works, whenever she is occupied with official duties.

In conclusion, although few people are against the idea of teenagers spending their time at home, I have benefitted from being made as a child to spend more time in the home, so I support it.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1439.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.496875 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23837055341 2.80592935109 80% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6434860548 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6470588235 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8235294118 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29411764706 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2537741568 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714949983517 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0982705262581 0.0667982634062 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196422871201 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114551386363 0.056905535591 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 13.0946893788 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.82 12.4159519038 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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