Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will be no longer necessary because people can see historical objects and works of art by using a computer. Do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that there is no need to build and develop museums and art galleries because of the convenience and availability of computer. I totally disagree with this idea due to two main reasons below.
It is undoubtable that the advent of computer and wide Internet has given people access to all the places which are historically, culturally significant, regardless of geographical distance. Some people prefer the comforts at home when they can watch images about artwork and read information about history. However, these experiences can not be compared to the experience of being in the presence of a museum or art gallery. It is obviously more vivid and intriguing to see the real work of art or the artifacts, allowing to broaden people’s mind as well as encourage their motivation for learning about other country’s culture and history.
Moreover, visiting museums and art galleries also brings another huge benefit, which is architecture of the place people come. While watching the artworks or learning about historical facts, visitors also can admire the extraordinary architectural grandeur. For example, many people have paid a considerable amount of money not to visit Hoi an gallery not just because it possesses huge collection of national masterpieces, but also because it exhibits the aesthetically beautiful architecture. This is the worthwhile experience that sitting at home and watch everything via a screen could not bring to art or historical lovers.
In conclusion, due to the reasons mentions, I am convinced that the feeling of using the computer of any digital devices to see historical objects and artworks is far different from the one of paying a visit to historical or cultural sites. Therefore, the necessity of these places is not rejected by individuals and authorities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1527.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26551724138 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05613163116 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596551724138 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5059431252 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.25 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32245207037 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0999608308985 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558577234372 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167913429191 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427665880189 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.