Some people feel that young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others, however, believe that young people should be free to behave as individuals.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Tradition is one of the uppermost factors that contribute to mankind’s development in general. It is believed that long-established traditions should be sustained by the young generation, while some people presume that youngsters should be permitted to behave the way they are confident with. In my estimation, I agree with the idea of letting children have their behavioral management as this action might provide them with great maturation progress.
First and foremost, the deciding element involved in giving individuals incentives to behave according to the rules is that they will inexplicably become a moralist. Discipline is not only about the moral embodiment but also one of the models of achieving control and mastery over people’s senses. To exemplify, it undoubtedly helps people keep their anxiety and negativity summoning in mind when it comes to abrupt problematic and turbulent situations, which enhances the possibility to solve the issues with a sense of wisdom. In contrast, although it seems to be the most effective method to handle unwanted repercussions, the youth’s creativity and imagination would be confined strictly.
Contrary to popular belief, a set of indigenous cultures may pose some restrictions on maturation and growth since this will undoubtedly hurt their ingenuity and curiosity. Surprisingly, most people who are set to be a disciplinarian by their parents or community based on various traditional rules are prone to suffer from neophobia which stops them from exploring new things. This, as a result, would lead to an inactive lifestyle in which young adults need to listen and obey their parents’ words. In order words, their confidence and independence will be considerably increased if they are encouraged to decide their behavior.
On balance, despite having been considered as an effective way to form a good manner and keep people’s attitudes under control, primitive cultures and traditions would unintentionally prevent young people from evolving their self-esteem and having their adventurous life stories. Admittedly, I believe that people who have their rights and power to live their lives the way they demand bring more ingenuity to their lives in particular and lucrative prospects to their country of origin in general.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, while, in contrast, in general, in particular, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50708215297 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06861769282 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597733711048 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.559485877 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.538461538 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1538461538 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84615384615 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282438398098 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0924010763836 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0799640274334 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170611052534 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406956076007 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.03 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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