Some people give more importance to artists (painter, writers, musicians) in the current age of rapidly developing technology and science. What do you think?Do people prefer arts to technology in your view?
In the world where scientific and technological advances dominated, people working in the field of arts are considered, having large impacts by many persons. The essay will discuss about my view points and trend individuals more interested art or technology than.
There are many factors, which appear in my brain about the consideration. First of all, Youngers are biased by artists from their internet accounts when technology and science are rapidly developed. Taking idols k-pop, who are being current object on mass media as a prime example, Netizens publicize for them; accordingly, fans are impacted by their fashion trend and then many sold-out items. furthermore, many famous icon brands will invite idols to purpose advertisement and ambassadors through social media in high- tech age. In addition, people working in the field of art and scientific advancements still need to support for together; in other words, if artists want to create a new product, they will force to spend a long time and be fixed by high-tech apps. In contrast, when the technology and science field debuts a new item, they will need to use artist’s popularities to promote the recognition of this product.
In my thought, the majority of everyone in the world will choose tech and science field instead of arts. To begin, life condition of humans will be improved by high-tech items like domestic robots, computers, smartphone so on; indeed, no one can sustained when high-tech products disappear in the current age of scientific advancements, and their life will be became chaotic. Next, technology helps t easy for people to find suitable jobs; moreover, their income increases and the immigration of innercity rate declines.
<p class="MsoNormal">In conclusion, I think that artists and technological fields
are supporting to develop together; furthermore, standard living also rises
higher than depends on technology and science.<o:p></o:p></p>
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, then, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1673.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52145214521 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32928552058 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623762376238 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.4997625826 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.416666667 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.75 7.06120827912 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193133701003 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0740269955422 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050942244773 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102694934095 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047565110316 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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