Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is alwaysa good think. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.
Staying in conform zone is believed the best way to enjoy life, while others feel that someone should take challenge in their life. This essay will explain both of view these issues and reach a opinion.
Firstly, societies who do not like challenge tend to choose jobs which without risk. Taking civil servants as example, they earn fix sallary every month from the government. By this condition, their financial condition would be always stabil, so that workers can manage their spending dan saving every month. Furthermore, challenges which face by employees are low risk. Societies tend to save their money in bank than invest in market stock because their money would safer saver in bank , while in market stock condition of investment is unpredictable so that market stock has high risk.
On the other hand, supporters of change say that challenge would give us lots of knowledge. For example, Thomas Alfa Edison should be fail for his research in finding lamps for 1000 times, but he always tried to enrich his knowledge although difficult to find solution of his research. By reading lots of reference, Thomas can find solution of his research and success to find lamp. In addition, traders who choose change usually would become rich. It is because they preferr to invest in comodity that is high risk. For example investment in market stock. This masket is fluctuatif and high risk but they would earn much money from their investment.
To sum up, it seems to me that challenge is crucial in life because whatever we do usually has challenge and by challenge someone can get knowledge and financial.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ain both of view these issues and reach a opinion. Firstly, societies who do n...
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Line 3, column 419, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es tend to save their money in bank than invest in market stock because their mon...
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Line 3, column 489, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...se their money would safer saver in bank , while in market stock condition of inve...
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Line 4, column 422, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put between 'would' and 'become'.
Suggestion: would usually become
... In addition, traders who choose change usually would become rich. It is because they preferr to inv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, while, for example, in addition, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1342.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9520295203 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42195435326 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579335793358 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 394.2 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6465731166 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4666666667 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0666666667 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0710617566682 0.244688304435 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0259821193003 0.084324248473 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0292412703801 0.0667982634062 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0452266858315 0.151304729494 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021528515776 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ain both of view these issues and reach a opinion. Firstly, societies who do n...
^
Line 3, column 419, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es tend to save their money in bank than invest in market stock because their mon...
^^
Line 3, column 489, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...se their money would safer saver in bank , while in market stock condition of inve...
^^
Line 4, column 422, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put between 'would' and 'become'.
Suggestion: would usually become
... In addition, traders who choose change usually would become rich. It is because they preferr to inv...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, while, for example, in addition, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1342.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9520295203 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42195435326 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579335793358 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 394.2 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6465731166 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4666666667 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0666666667 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0710617566682 0.244688304435 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0259821193003 0.084324248473 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0292412703801 0.0667982634062 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0452266858315 0.151304729494 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021528515776 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.