Some people say that children should spend their free time on clubs and extra classes. Others, however, believe they should spend their leisure time doing activities with their families. Discuss both of views and give your own opinion.
Some people believe that it is important for young people to spend their spare time on extra activities like clubs and extra classes. However, others state that family activities should be prioritized by young people to spend more time. In this essay, I will discuss both views and then I will give my own perspective.
On the one hand, many people argue that children's leisure time should be used for educational purposes or extracurricular clubs. When young people participate in extracurricular activities, they have more opportunities to arouse their passion coupled with learning some soft skills such as communication or leadership. As a result, they easily adapt and integrate better in many different living environments as well as in the process of self-improvement. In addition, extra classes significantly contribute to the fixation, enhancement of knowledge which helps the youth complete their academic performance. For exams, Vietnamese students may not be able to keep up with course content because lessons are limited in time. Thus, they tend to join extra classes to gain higher results in exams and enroll in the universities they desire.
On the other hand, others think that it is necessary for children to engage in family activities instead of after-school clubs or supplement classes. By doing activities with family, this can foster the relationship between family members. In particular, if parents play with their children, it helps parents easily understand their children and will have a suitable parenting method that aims to orient them back to good citizens of society. Furthermore, through joining in activities together, children can share their feelings and get helpful suggestions from other members to solve their own problems. Therefore, youngsters can release the stress and study pressure which make them uncomfortable.
To conclude, people have different opinions on how children spend their free time. However, I do believe that children should balance both extracurricular activities and family activities so that they can develop comprehensively both emotionally and intellectually.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, well, in addition, in particular, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1808.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54601226994 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0963184714 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573619631902 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2902467141 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.375 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.525121225475 0.244688304435 215% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150825270966 0.084324248473 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0996526236496 0.0667982634062 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.329192867202 0.151304729494 218% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0985985073456 0.056905535591 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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