Some students prefer to take a gap year and between high school university to work or to travel Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

Nowadays, more and more young people tend to take a break from studying after graduating from high school to travel or work before entering university. Even though there are some drawbacks behind this practice, I still hold the belief that the merits overshadow the demerits.

Admittedly, losing academic momentum and rusting knowledge are two main obstacles which the young can face when they take a gap year. Firstly, if they spend too much time working and traveling, they do not desire to continue to pursue higher education in the future. They had appealing experiences as well as unforgettable memories. As a result, they think that they should spend their whole time undertaking a job rather than being involved in tertiary education. In addition, it is difficult for students to catch up with their peers and the study progress because they bury the comprehension in oblivion. Apparently, when they focus on traveling coupled with working, they do not have opportunities to review and practice their specialized knowledge for a long time. Therefore, they seem to encounter many troubles after going back to their academic environment for study.

However, I am inclined to think that the young can gain more work-related skill experiences together with hands-on knowledge. In terms of working, in the process of young people taking up a job, they have more chances to get exposed to a wide range of work environments, colleagues and many unexpected problems. Thus, they can obtain firsthand experiences and enhance their soft skills such as problem-solving and time management which are necessary assistance for them in the career path. Moreover, traveling provides students with various real-life knowledge. For example, if students move to another country, they will broaden their horizons by learning about the local people’s life and culture. This aims to bring to the young a well-rounded life which develops themselves.

To conclude, although taking a year off can bring some hindrances, the advantages still outweigh the disadvantages. Having abreaks can help students better themselves by developing new skills and forming a more holistic perspective.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, in addition, such as, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37426900585 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89686259003 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611111111111 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.7073634874 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.117647059 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1176470588 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41176470588 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172861258349 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555870962407 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529801208323 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119647244015 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430944110583 0.056905535591 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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