Some people say that the experiences a child has before starting school have the most influence on their future life Others say that experiences as a teenager especially at school are more influential Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Some people say that the experiences a child has before starting school have the most influence on their future life. Others say that experiences as a teenager, especially at school, are more influential.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion?

Citizens have sparked off an argument about the roles played by different stages of life in youngsters’ development. While many citizens believe that preschool period exert a remarkable impact on children, I opine that experience during teenager stage offers more significant influences.

On the one hand, experience prior to starting school is recognised as a critical contribution factor to a person’s lifestyle and characteristic. Indeed, during their formative years, babies and toddlers tend to imitate surrounding adults, which has been proved to form their patterns of behavior and reflect in how they interact with others in the future. For instance, in a recent investigation into domestic violence, 80% of assailants revealed that they acted as what they witnessed during their babyhood, including physical, verbal or sexual abusing scenes between their parents. In fact, personality formation is a gradual process, which is accumulated even when a person enters his adult life. However, the earlier we expose to a phenomenon, the more likely it is adopted, so this instinct suggest that memories before attending primary can leave a more indelible impression than that of any other life stage.

On the other hand, it seems to me that the aforementioned impacts can be overshadowed by those reaped from teenager stage. From an education perspective, it is not until this period are youngsters instructed to explain facts in black and white, and equipped with various thinking skills. In other words, attending school during adolescence provides them with an unprecedented cognitive development by which they can enhance their competencies and become better-prepared for prospective occupation. In addition, from a social perspective, no sooner do youngsters enter teenager than their interaction with parents begins to blur, while that with strangers and friends gets more frequent. Therefore, this accelerate their maturity by enabling them to entirely grasp the complexity of human relationship, and integrating themselves into a community as an independent individuals rather than children embraced by their families.

In brief, while not disavowing the influences of experience at an early age, I believe that the effects of teenager stage, with the acquisition of school education, are more noteworthy to juvenile development.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in brief, in fact, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2002.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63943661972 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10710226852 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622535211268 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.3859021819 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.0 106.682146367 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3076923077 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.15384615385 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181669411153 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643872614448 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451725576363 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120263158669 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367433649883 0.056905535591 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 50.2224549098 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.73 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.71 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 78.4519038076 164% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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