Some people say free time activities for children should be organized (by parents). Others say that children should be free to choose what they do in their free time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Hitherto, globalization has led to some disparities in the credo of kids’ management, and the question of whether parents should control the leisure time of their children or not has been raising public attention. I will discuss both opinions by giving some rational evidence.
First and foremost, it is conspicuous that kids are easily appealed to by games and cartoons, so they spend most of their free time immersed in these activities. That is why, in some adults cognition, they have to put kids under their tutelage in order not to let them become addicted. Furthermore, ready-made routes can increase the performance of kids in studying due to the rational break period. Putting aside these benefits, there is a huge drawback to controlling kids too much, and flexibility is one of them. If children always follow a ready-made route, it means they could be at risk of being passive, which could affect the flexibility of their work in the future. What’s more, the compulsory of their parents deters kids from interacting with their friends, shortening their relationships and isolating them from the outside world. A vivid example is that somewhere in Vietnam, due to the credo that adults are always right and the over-control of parents, kids have become autistic.
On the other hand, letting kids free in their leisure time is believed to be rational in some places. Children are very vulnerable, so the way parents teach them affects their characteristics a lot. Freedom can give kids relaxation, and it can also shield them from parents’ tutelage, which limits kids’ creativity. On top of that, this way of teaching can allow children to learn new things from many sources of knowledge, such as: books, the internet,... In America, children are free in their leisure time, so they can acquire a wealth of new knowledge, which is very helpful in their career. Although many people lament that their kids can acquire bad things from the internet, this is also a chance for kids to learn. An early-open mind can help children to understand fully the world.
Giving kids freedom in free time is obviously better than over-controlling them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 91, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...s in the credo of kids’ management, and the question of whether parents should control the leisure time...
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Line 2, column 183, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adults'' or 'adult's'?
Suggestion: adults'; adult's
... these activities. That is why, in some adults cognition, they have to put kids under ...
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Line 3, column 452, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
... knowledge, such as: books, the internet,... In America, children are free in thei...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, so, such as, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 358.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03072625698 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75788871944 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530726256983 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.0 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9735839708 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.941176471 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0588235294 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47058823529 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270654102355 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0960858952423 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757442675402 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184390508889 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360214844485 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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