Some people say that it is possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
People have different views about sustainable development. While some people argue that it is impossible to simultaneously succeed in economic development and environment protection, I believe that we can achieve both targets.
On the one hand, there are many reasons why it can be argued that economic targets cannot be achieved without causing environmental problems. Perhaps the principal reason is that in order to meet the growing demand for energy, tapping of natural resources seems to be the most feasible solution and such activities unavoidably pose serious risks to the fragile environment. For example, when we discover a source of oil in a place, we might have to cut down all the trees in that area if we want to exploit it. Another reason is that the environment could be affected by the industrialization, which any developed countries have to undergo. Clearly, carbon emissions or waste are inevitable results from production processes of factories and industrial zones.
On the other hand, I am of opinion that we can develop our economy and preserve the natural environment at the same time. Firstly, if the government heavily invested in alternative energy sources, the over-dependence on fossil fuel could be reduced and this allows us to maintain our development while decreasing the level of environmental contamination. For example, Oman which used to be completely dependent on non-renewable energy now mainly uses environmental-friendly energy such as solar power for their industrial activities. Secondly, it is evident that countries which develop a service-oriented economy are not only rich, but their environment is also friendly and stable. Sweden, for example, has a robust economy, thanks to putting an emphasis on protecting its natural habitats and developing tourism.
In conclusion, I would contend that by taking justifiable measure we can attain both economic achievements and environmental sustainability, although some people assist in rejecting this worthy aim.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1705.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51779935275 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.34388940286 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621359223301 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3714102903 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.153846154 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7692307692 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76923076923 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229104031594 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0771040620448 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482309629739 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14815225081 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377816834727 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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