Individuals should not be allowed to carry guns. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Some people argue that we should prohibit citizens from possessing guns. I totally agree with this view.
I am of opinion that providing everyone with access to guns could potentially lead to less-than-desire consequences. The first reason is that the presence of firearms in the house might threaten survival and safety of family members and even bystanders. For instance, a child might think a gun as a toy and unintentionally shot himself or a person visiting their friend’s house at night could be mistakenly shot dead because the householder might believe that he was an intruder. Another reason is that although advocates of gun ownership contend that guns could be used effectively in legitimate defense situations, they underestimate the danger when those weapons are fallen into hands of criminals and especially terrorists. Indeed, the recent mass shootings in France and America, which killed and injured many innocent citizens, remind us again about the negative outcome of gun ownership.
I believe that governments should put a ban on gun ownership because it would bring greater benefits to society as a whole. Firstly, it is no doubt clear that criminals would have less opportunity to possess firearms, resulting in a lower rate of crime. The clearest example of this is that countries that have strict gun control laws such as Vietnam or the United Kingdom have significantly less violent crimes than countries such as the United States where guns are still easily accessible. Secondly, gun control would help governments reduce remarkable societal costs associated with gun violence such as life insurance, medical care for injured victims or policing for the protection of security. Therefore fund could be allocated to pressing issues such as education or housing shortage.
In conclusion, I would argue that the possession of guns should be outlawed because of the potential danger stemming from the proliferation of gun crimes and great benefits this policy brings to our society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 702, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...olicing for the protection of security. Therefore fund could be allocated to pressing iss...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1699.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32601880878 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90468602301 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611285266458 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.8744547376 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.692307692 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5384615385 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0980005884526 0.244688304435 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463468486942 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571338264923 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0916808449604 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0664673490499 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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