Throughout the history, male leaders always lead us to violence and conflict. If a society is governed by female leaders it will be more peaceful. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people argue that male politicians are responsible for aggression and constant tensions between countries and if women were elevated into leadership roles, we would have a more peaceful society. However, I disagree with this view.
On the one hand, I acknowledge that many fierce wars, attended with painful consequences, have occurred under male leadership. Those who advocate for this view generally contended that wars stem from the nature of men, who are supposedly always aggressive and bad-tempered. First World War and Second World War, for example, caused millions of casualties and leaders like Adolf Hitler are criticized for having created blood wars. However, I would argue that those decisions are definitely not a product of personality traits of a leader, but a reflection of perspectives of various people and groups involved. It is no doubt clear that the rise of Adolf Hitler and his ambitions of domination in Europe reflected more of a common desire of many Germans and other politicians than his own interest.
On the other hand, it is absurd to say that feminine leadership model will make the world more peaceful. Firstly, history shows that female leaders could also make bellicose decisions that men do in the face of oppressive conditions and provocative actions. For instance, having been suffering under cruel rules of Chinese governors, Trung Trac who is a national hero of Vietnam established a kingdom as the Queen and led a rebellion against Chinese invasions. Another example is that Victoria, after having become Queen of the United Kingdom, also invaded India, China, and many countries in close succession. Secondly, in the future, decisions between war and peace will depend not on gender, but how leaders combine soft- and hard-power skills to produce smart strategies. This means that it would be completely wrong to inject a man in favour of a woman when both of them possess the ability to make such decisions.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that women do not hold the key to world peace, what we need is government leaders who could implement feasible policies to cease hostilities
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17291066282 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74011728569 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608069164265 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4829692126 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.214285714 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7857142857 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35714285714 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152786826002 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490896368268 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376942836325 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0914267828437 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0277854472393 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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