Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Many are of the opinion that the power of music can connect people despite the generations and nationalities. From my perspective, I firmly agree with this belief because music not only helps people find others who have the same interest but also provides an effective way to learn a new language.
To begin with, it is an undeniable fact that people can come into contact with each other through music because of its catchy melody. In this regard, music does not target just a single person but a whole group of audiences sharing the same genre of music. Taken Kpop music as an example, it is manifest that its popularity is stretching all over the world, even though the lyrics are usually in Korean with a few English words. Furthermore, whenever any Korean music bands make a tour to another country, the tickets to their concerts would be sold out immediately right after five or ten minutes. Hence, this is why music can bring people who love the same type of music together.
Another positive aspect that music influences our society is to be an efficient opportunity to learn a new language. Many language teachers would suggest their students listen to music to improve their target language skills. In this perspective, English would be a striking instance because many English learners have often agreed that listening to English songs boosted their listening and pronunciation skills up or even expanded their lexical resources. Moreover, these language learners could have a chance to explore the culture that the lyrics in their favorite songs resemble.
To sum up, I believe in the benefits that music can bring to humans in terms of connecting people from different parts of the world, coming in touch with those sharing the same vibe of music as well as being an effective tool to learn a new language. In the future, I expect to see more influence that music would have on humans.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so, well, as well as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85230769231 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49246723136 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547692307692 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.3732138433 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.307692308 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218802289349 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861599021746 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632228614237 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150266539874 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633873894371 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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