Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together Do you agree or disagree

As far as we know, Music is instrumental in all aspects of life and I also hold a stern belief with the notion that There has no limitations in languages and generations of music, regardless of ages, genres or different cultures and generations. To clarify, I would put my own viewpoint in writing.
To begin with, I appreciate with music's advantageous merits, especially in the social and cultural aspects. In this day and age, There has many songs that create international effects. Each song will also express the mental values, simultaneously, showing an unique and characteristic melody of that country into the song clearly. For example, Despacito is an ample song and have an increasingly spontaneous impacts when it released into few hours and achieved a record number of viewers. By this endless inspiration, people all across the world can comprehend profoundly, widen the knowledges about the customes and moral values of this country that putting into songs.. Moreover, it is the contributors to strengthen all relationships and exposed a healthy environment
Last but not least, Music has also a great influence in regardless of ages. Taking into consideration the styles of music nowadays, most of youngsters are having the Europeanization music propensity, whlist, in elder age that keeping themselves a light and traditional musical inspiration. Although having a distinguish between two generations, Music is also instrumental in keeping a fire with passion and tied to be diversified when they exchange their styles of music, they are more aware of other level of ages and have no discrimination in the enjoyment of music
In conclusion, I firmly believe that Music brings with more beneficial merits with what we are considerable. Not only there are some aforementioned radical reasons, also have other potential effects in relation to other aspects of life.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, then, for example, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1581.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15502245106 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606666666667 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.1476972412 49.4020404114 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.727272727 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2727272727 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146008450087 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048318040998 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0386210751112 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0832707117647 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0206022486853 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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