Some people say that parents have the most important role in a child‘s development. However, others argue that other things like television or friends
have the most significant influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
A society viewed as whether potential or not depends largely on the quality of young generations. So, in recent years, there are much debate that factors that have profound impact on children’s development are either the responsibility of their parents or their surrounding environment including television or friends. In this essay, the importance of each factor will be discussed clearly.
It is highly indisputable that parents who gave birth to their children play a decisive role in their growth. Particularly, from being a child to a real adult, children will be influenced strongly by their parents’ attitude and behavior that partly shape their future characteristics or widely, their lifestyle. What’s more, regarding children’s physical development, parents are those who equip their children with enough living necessities, good education and even entertainment. In some case, without the unconditional love of parents, children will have a tendency to be rude or less determined in their study or life.
Apart from the role of parents, some environmental factors like television and friends also have proved their importance to children’s thinking or behaving. Because children’s parents can not be able to stay with them all daytime, thus their understanding, to a certain degree, can be affected by the kind of their friends or the information source from television. For instance, it is stated by scientists that children can be likely to learn and imitate very rapidly what they watch without distinguishing whether or not it is correct. As a result, they will remake it as a daily habit and if their parents does not recognize it in time, it can penetrate deeply into their personality in a negative way.
To sum up, although parents are those who lay a solid foundation for the development of their children, but it is highly stated that the impact of television or friends as environmental factors should not be ignored to avoid leading their children to a improper and less efficient world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... what they watch without distinguishing whether or not it is correct. As a result, they will r...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...penetrate deeply into their personality in a negative way. To sum up, although parents are those...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ored to avoid leading their children to a improper and less efficient world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, regarding, so, thus, apart from, for instance, kind of, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1704.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25925925926 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08029020975 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54012345679 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.9434417256 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.0 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119133525158 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0578499688698 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469052281351 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0865857584475 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022719133795 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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