Some people say that rich countries should help poor countries with trade health and education Do you agree or disagree Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience

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Some people say that rich countries should help poor countries with trade, health and education. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience.

Opinions vary on whether it is essential or not that wealthy countries take the responsibility for assistance towards poor developing nations in commerce, education and health fields in particular. Observing all advantages and disadvantages, I strongly believe that international aid from industrial countries is rather imperative and it would be obviously more beneficial than negatively influential for the population overall.
First and foremost, developing countries are plagued by the overwhelming number of issues that they are unable to tack with independently due to the lack of financial resources. Even when they are striving to address some problems and remedy the situation by external financial sources such as World Bank. This frequently leads to the total disappearance of money and no changes in the weak life conditions. Whereas wealthy governments have enough accumulations, proficiency and experience to share their valuable knowledge with poor states and deteriorate the severe degree of poverty and unemployment rates of particular countries, combat with the lack of education and address the weak international trade. Just to exemplify, recently the G8 assembly has forgiven tremendous part of developing countries’ debts and introduce new system of loans with less-percentage interest rate. It forced the enhancement of poor countries ability for further evolvement.
Furthermore, the majority of African countries are under sub-human conditions for existence and they lack any financial resources to make any changes. Also, the fast-paced spread of hazardous diseases results in even more detrimental effects that they unable to tackle with. The advent of technology in industrial countries ensures them with high quality equipment and talented specialists to cope with majority of health disorders, hence it is obviously necessary to relocate some educated personal for remedy the demanding population from time to time. Last but not the least, it is of note that developing countries tend to export mostly agricultural products and raw materials whereas import industrial products and processed items what inevitably leads to deficit in economy. At the same time, developed nations could direct poor countries in creation new sources of income such as erection fabrics and proper utilization of their own lands and natural resources what will hardly increase their national incomes.
To conclude, I firmly believe, that aid from wealthy governments to poor states and countries could be much more beneficial than it is expected. It would reinforce international relationships dramatically, hardly reduce the gap between rich and developing countries and promote to significant part and parcel of population decent living conditions.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 919, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, so, whereas, as for, in particular, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2354.0 1615.20841683 146% => OK
No of words: 410.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.74146341463 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11542381647 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573170731707 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 738.0 506.74238477 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.3707908845 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.933333333 106.682146367 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229957088592 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761087231264 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466039342703 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142863441921 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0172670836008 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 50.2224549098 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.31 12.4159519038 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.21 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 78.4519038076 173% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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