Some people say that sports play an important role in society Others however think that it is nothing more than a leisure activity Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Essay topics:

Some people say that sports play an important role in society. Others, however, think that it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is thought that sports keep a neccessary function in the population life, but other people believe sports is nothing more than a leisure activity. From my point of view, at some situation i mostly agree with the first notion because of its benefits in the society. The following essay will analyse this statement in detail.
first of all, in the industrialized world and with the appearence of modern technology that various dangerous disease have appeared more frequenly, so sports is greatly significant for the individuals. Not only will this activity protect people's health away from demerits element which improve immune systerm of adolesence the propotion of death person will be reduced gradually and also the socioeconomic problem can be narrowed with the connection of sports community, advanced their mentality life. Furthermore, numerous occupation will be created such as sports player which decrease the percentage of unemployment and homeless people in their countries. To illustrate, there was a vurvey by Tom Maritch, the famous interviewer and professor, which is expert about the success of postgraduates in New York who enjoy to play sports. The statistic demonstrated that nearly everyone has got plenty of achievement in their career.
However, we can not negate the drawbacks of this phenomenon for the society. the teenagers will be easy to get unneccessy accident which have weakness affection for their improvement. Morover, many government take advantage from sports equipment's investment for their own revenue, harmful influence will be led by this action to the young generations.
To conclude, though my agrument from the essay, i totally agree with the importance role of sports, but it still have some negative aspect for the society. The state need to have clear plans to improve their citizens for the nation's development.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, still, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1569.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35494880546 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86988710996 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627986348123 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.249996981 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.692307692 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5384615385 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84615384615 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137134951736 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459324749229 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636186850964 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0883390633665 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062999929802 0.056905535591 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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