In the contemporary world, opinions are divided whether children’s behaviour are influenced by what they see or that base on the amount of time they spend on watching TV.
On the one hand, those who advocate the idea of influencing behaviour link to what children watch have their reason.
children , especially preschoolers would tend to copy what they see around us. This mean that they easy to adopt content from some program on TV, which could be positive or negative base on the content what the children watch. For example, with some educational program on TV, the preschoolers could gain a lot of knowledge about good behaviour. "Hi Five" is a prime example of an educational channel broadcasting several educational program for equipping soft skill which required to learn and grow. Beside, there are several program have crime, sex and violence content are broadcasted on TV , which contribute to impressionable people become more aggressive and impulsive in the future.
However, I support the view of those who believe children's behaviour depend mostly on how long they spend on television. The first thing I can mention is that human tend to defer to other behavioral when this behavioral are repeated many times. This by mean if people especially the age group 6 to 10 watch TV in a long time , it could impact on their thinking. That is not to mention over-watching tv could discourage human interactions and badly affect the society as a whole. While other outdoor activities such as sports could improve both physical and mental health by burning calories and building muscle, spending long hours watching the telly may fall their social skill such as conversation skill.
In conclusion, although content program on TV could influence to children behavioral , the amount of watching-TV time is the main factor impact on their thinking.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14802631579 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84003697189 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565789473684 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2834337772 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.384615385 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3846153846 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328369472553 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116468094573 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853202671639 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20919041494 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0698087870683 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.