Some people say that what children watch influences their behaviour. Others believe that the amount of time they spend on television influences their behaviour most. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
While it is believed that watching TV affects children, it is hard to determine whether it is the content of TV programs or the large amount of time they spend on watching them that has an adverse effect on children. In my point of view, though the length of time does affect children, it is the content that has far more influence on them.
On the one hand, the consequences of watching TV for long periods could be deleterious. Firstly, the longer amount of time children are exposed to TV programs, the more likely it is for them to become addicted to television programs, which may hinder their social development. When children are getting over-reliant on television for entertainment, they might neglect engagement in outdoor activities, which lead to a sedentary habit that is relatively detrimental to their physical health. More crucially, over-watching Tv program impairs children’s communication abilities since they spend less time for social interaction. Therefore they may find it hard to integrate with other people.
On the other hand, it is the televised image contents that have the most serious impact on young viewers. First, in many countries, the vast majority of shows display glamorized depictions of inappropriate materials such as violence, drug abuse or casual sex. Thus, youngsters may try to adopt unhealthy habits and improper behaviour. For instance, they might be seduced by the impression that the use of alcoholic drinks is fashionable without being aware of health risks. Besides, as we are living in the consumerism era, commercials also have some impacts on how children behave. Unwary premature viewers could easily be appealed by captivating advertisements about junk food or video games, products whose target audience mostly is children. As a result, they might pester their parents to buy such goods impulsively.
In conclusion, for those reason mentioned above, it seems to me that what children watch on television has far more impact than the amount of time that they spend on. And parents should play their roles in controlling the content that children viewing.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...spend less time for social interaction. Therefore they may find it hard to integrate with...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, may, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19941348974 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88220715804 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58357771261 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6123670909 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.8125 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3125 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293441601294 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859433024244 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050987181183 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178138884594 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343287346487 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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