Some people suggest that children do not understand the world of work and schools should make all teenagers spend a short time working as well as studying academic subjects.To what extent do you agree?
In this day and age, the world is constantly evolving partly thanks to technology. To keep pace with that, humans need to obtain knowledge about a variety of aspects, including making money. This issue becomes a controversial topic, especially in school, where some people argue teenagers should not be made to work in a short time whilst I am an advocate of those who believes it’s a good way for young people’s development.
The first and foremost reason why schools should have students worked is to raise their awareness of using their assets. Earning a living can enable young people to become mature faster by avoiding wasting their time and money on nonsense things, or valuing what they have, and not demanding too much. It is because they have to pour their blood, sweat, and tears into making money. For example, students who work through university tend to spend less time or money on entertainment compared to their counterparts.
On the other hand, when working in a set of times, teenagers not only can still keep track of their study and study well but also learn various soft skills such as how to manage time efficiently, how to cope with pressure. All of those experiences could play a vital role in making their curriculum vitae more impressive or even partly leading to their success in the future.
In conclusion, I totally support the idea of requiring students to work in their age. Although it takes a short of time but can contribute to the big success of individuals later.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, so, still, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1256.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84942084942 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56660649125 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.633204633205 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 382.5 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.608621485 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.181818182 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5454545455 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.09090909091 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224207445531 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0763474775108 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488186840916 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128689144044 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291079397801 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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