Some people suggest that children do not understand the world of work and schools should make all teenagers spend a short time working as well as studying academic subjects. To what extent do you agree?
In this day and age, it is obvious that the demand of employees in many fields is increasingly high across many countries.To meet that demand, youngsters need to get expose to workplace so as to acquire relevant skills and experiences. This issue is becoming a controversial topic, especially in schools , where some people argue teenagers should spend more time studying instead of working whilst I am an advocate of those who believes working is one of the good ways for young people’s development.
The first and foremost reason why schools should have students worked is to raise their awareness of using their assets. Earning a living can enable young people to become mature faster by avoiding wasting their time and money on nonsense things, or appriciating what they have. It is because they have to pour their blood, sweat, and tears into making money. For example, students who work through university tend to spend less time or money on entertainment compared to their counterparts.
On the other hand, when working in a period of time, teenagers not only can still keep track of their study and study well but also learn various soft skills such as how to manage time efficiently, or how to cope with pressure. All of those experiences could play a vital role in making their curriculum vitae more impressive or even partly leading to their success in the future. A recent survey shows that the rate of students who can get high-salary jobs thanks to doing part-time jobs is relatively higher than those who do not.
In conclusion,it is obivious that working can not only change the student’s mindset in a more positive way but also improve their career prospect. Although it takes a short of time,its contribution is enormous to the success of individuals later.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, so, still, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1490.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96666666667 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70117851729 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.7647063952 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.454545455 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2727272727 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.72727272727 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245361392076 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0842983281778 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627551412357 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134212239601 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038788305819 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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