Some people tend to believe that the wild animals and birds need extra attention and people should protect them

Essay topics:

Some people tend to believe that the wild animals and birds need extra attention and people should protect them.

Some people tend to believe that the wild animals and birds need extra attention and people should protect them. Moreover we should prepare many facilities and resources to protect them particularly in these decades. In this essay, this issue will be discussed.
It is certainly obvious a lot of species of animals are on the brink of extinction and most of people all over the world do not pay attention to this issue. Moreover, we are not able to see many kinds of animals in the woods at this time such as some mammals. A recent study in Stanford University indicates more than 60 percent of animals species will die till 2050. Hence, human beings should pay attention the animals. To tackle this problems, the governments should restricte hunting and create a wide range of laws for predators who disobey the law firstly. By obey this kind of laws we can decrease the statistics of murdering of animals and birds.
Secondly, if the animals extinct, the life cycle face various problems. For instance, if a wild cat die, the animals which eat these kinds of cat as food will be die and it will continue for ever and it impact human beings and impress the life of them because we utilize some kinds of these animals or birds as food or cloths. The charities are able to help this situation. They can create a global organization all over the world and invite volunteer to help the animals in protected environments and it can lead to diminishing the dangerous of extinction. However, it needs to spend a lot of money to protect them such as expenditure of vaccination.
Finally, in spite of the fact that protect the animals need a bunch of money, the animals should be protected and people can do it by volunteers all over the word to reduce the expenditures. Personally, I am keen on animals and birds and from my point of view, we should be aware of the animals’s situation and support them.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 114, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...tention and people should protect them. Moreover we should prepare many facilities and r...
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Line 2, column 88, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...mals are on the brink of extinction and most of people all over the world do not pay attention...
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Line 2, column 432, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ld pay attention the animals. To tackle this problems, the governments should restri...
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Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'impacts'?
Suggestion: impacts
...ie and it will continue for ever and it impact human beings and impress the life of th...
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Line 4, column 146, Rule ID: ALL_OVER_THE_WORD[1]
Message: Did you mean 'all over the world' (=globally)?
Suggestion: all over the world
...cted and people can do it by volunteers all over the word to reduce the expenditures. Personally,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for instance, kind of, such as, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64985163205 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58326628734 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492581602374 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4549366603 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.9375 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0625 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.420021029251 0.244688304435 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146409271892 0.084324248473 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.230451088075 0.0667982634062 345% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.30961363139 0.151304729494 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.183316473877 0.056905535591 322% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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