Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole.
Do you agree or disagree?
Owing to the significant increasing of society’s problems, opinion has been divided on whether or not adolescents should be forced to do voluntary work in their spare time. Although many pragmatic works by young people benefit the society, the idea that we should force them to do unpaid works is entirely against my belief.
Most young people are already under enough pressure with their studies, without being given some unpaid works in their spare time. This party because of the fact that teacher might want their students to concentrate to do large amounts of homework or assignments to obtain flying colors in official tests. Another reason is that their parents believe a good transcript could easily bring them some chief university, hence securing a high-paid stable job. At the same time, unpaid work could bring chances for them to be aware of some problems challenging society such as working with the needy or the poor. However, this type of work requires maturity and experience which the young people omit to possess.
Reasonably, I doubt that local community could gain some efficient result from obliging students to do unpaid work. An illustration, a friend of mine, at the age of 17, volunteered at a large-scale campaign for kids under 8 years old in a national park. He had appointed as a captain of a team which is full of little elf and main cooker. He, obviously, had manifold means of work and had forgotten fire was still burned after cooking. That this case could have been a great fire and made people face the death, had not the chief leader noticed and yelled out loud. This demonstrates that young people would simply damage a project.
In conclusion, teenagers may choose to work as a volunteer, but in my opinion we should not make this become compulsory.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...s problems, opinion has been divided on whether or not adolescents should be forced to do volu...
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Line 2, column 142, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...d works in their spare time. This party because of the fact that teacher might want their students to co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, so, still, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1494.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89836065574 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56969291701 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619672131148 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.5356131692 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.714285714 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7857142857 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311594998353 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0991271749886 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063193024772 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179594566025 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0598715517446 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.