Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole.Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole.

Do you agree or disagree?

Opinion has been divided on whether or not juveniles should be asked to do voluntary work in their spare time to help the local society, that would benefit themselves and also the community. Notwithstanding, I against the idea that we should force them to do the unpaid work.

Modern society requires more high-calibre staffs so that the education of children is now the most considerable element. Therefore, teenagers nowadays have to study more, and also have more assignments than ever before, and their free time is less. They would not like to do work in their spare time while the schooling brings enough stress for them. Provided that teenagers are obliged to do anything that is not their favors, they would do it without carefully considerable attention, thereby worse qualify. With that horrible consequence, the local society might not receive the benefits from the juveniles.

Some proponents of the preceding idea might argue that voluntary work probably teaches the teenagers some pragmatic lessons, and also improve their skills, which could help them in the future. However, I do not believe that the times that teenagers spend on unpaid work could be enough for them to learn or practice something is new, especially skills. Learning something always need a great deal of time for teenagers to absorb, and to know a thing more specifically would be impossible. They do not have enough time for that based on the school’s schedule of tests in a semester, besides mock test.

In conclusion, we should not require teenagers to do unpaid work in their spare time because of their busy schooling.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 29, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
Opinion has been divided on whether or not juveniles should be asked to do volunta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, so, therefore, while, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1356.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07865168539 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69324069251 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535580524345 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.2894502808 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.437133394845 0.244688304435 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162797945397 0.084324248473 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0772317338974 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.289286984864 0.151304729494 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0230025084136 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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