Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
With paying more attention to education, opinion has been divided on whether or not encouraging children to be self-regulation. While some people argue that children make decisions by them self would be pivotal, I still believe that it could make them be more selfish, hence negative effects on societies.
There are several plausible reasons why people might argue that children should not be independently making choices. Firstly, children would have more chances to grow up into selfish individuals. A case in point is that my nephew is always insisting on watching her favorite programs on television and he only prioritize what he wants. In the future, this attitude would interfere their work performance because they could not have ability to work in a team. Secondly, the pivotal position of parents would be disappeared providing that children are permitted to be independent from their childhood.
Despite the foregoing arguments, I support the view that self-regulation is the most necessary skill children should learn. Some studies reveal that children who can solve problems independently at home could be more successful in their study performance. It is partly because they could find the most appropriate study-methods for themselves and also their own motivation which depends on individual character. Besides, they would be responsible for their duty when they involve in problems by their preceding mistakes. Therefore, they would have opportunities to secure a high-paid job in the future.
In conclusion, self-decision, despite its drawbacks, I believe that the merits would eclipse the disadvantages in the long term.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'prioritizes'.
Suggestion: prioritizes
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o secure a high-paid job in the future. In conclusion, self-decision, despite it...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, hence, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1396.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49606299213 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0564470687 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.622047244094 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.723380565 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 107.384615385 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5384615385 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174891365669 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593017156863 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409276112063 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0985056309467 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308838901378 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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