Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, there has been an upsurge in the number of offenders all over the world and the ways to find efficacious remedies to this alarming rate of crimes. It is quite controversial that whether or not prisoners ought to engage in community order as an alternative to being put behind bars. From my point of view, I wholeheartedly agree with this statement due to some following reasons.
First and foremost, one potential benefit of making sinners do social services is that they can make a great contribution to the development of the whole society. For example, when culprits clean the streets, the beaches, or plant trees in the park, the environmental pollution will decrease as well as our living environment will be well enhanced. That definitely helps local individuals less likely to suffer from many diseases due to some external causes.
Furthermore, in respect to the criminals themselves, they can feel a sense of being respected and recognized by the community. This will exert a positive impact on their cognitive development especially youngsters that they are also be capable of devoting to the society and making our world become better and better like other people without any barriers. As a result, they will be motivated and do social affairs more thoroughly, more willingly in preference to be forced to do behind bars.
Last but not least, when offenders expose to individuals through casework, it is more likely that people are going to reduce their prejudices to those who are prisoners on the grounds that they have improved their personalities by means of doing good deeds to others. Therefore, after they are released back into the society, it intensifies the possibility that people will give ex-offenders a chance of rehabilitation and help them embark a normally meaningful life and become a helpful citizen.
To recapitulate, I wholeheartedly believe that felonies should be encouraged to do welfare work rather than being imposed to work behind bars. It is crucial to have a significant influence on their minds, their consciousness, which will help them make a fresh start more easily after in custodial sentence.
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...ference to be forced to do behind bars. Last but not least, when offenders expos...
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...e easily after in custodial sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, for example, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1811.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15954415954 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94907714894 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586894586895 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.6415460281 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.307692308 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07692307692 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248012433592 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883777524219 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0967876130797 0.0667982634062 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133432739147 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560920543496 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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