Some people think that developing countries need financial help from international organisations. Others think that it is practical aid and advice that is needed. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is true that the question of whether global relief would be effective if multinational organisations offer financial help for undeveloped countries or not has caused vigorous debate. While many individuals argue that this kind of support is promissing, I contend that other helps, either practical aid or advice, merit considerations.
On the one hand, it is understandable why a handful of organisations prefer money support. With this relief, recipient countries, where often endure economical deprivation, would eliminate poverty and stand a chance with developed world in the long run. Africa, for example, a nation that is infamous for poor standard of living, could be invested heavily in heavy industry with state-of-the-art technology or ecotoursim with safari, which is a promissing sector thanks to financial assistance. Consequently, the more money those underprivileged nations receive, the more tangible benefits the gain, the sooner they shake off poverty.
On the other hand, I would advocate with those who maintain that hands-on help and advice could be more effective than finjancial one. It is fair to say that those developing countries have been suffering from the severe lack of well-educated workforce, which is the core factor contribute to the sustainable development of a nation. Financial relief, therefore, do not suffice for these countries and seems to be futile if practical aid and advice are underestimated. In other words, those international bodies should send specialists and advisers to these nations to instruct the locals how to manufacture effectively and efficiently such as tech them about extensive farming method and operation of latest technology, voluntary teachers could also be allocated to teach deprived children.
In conclusion, it seems to me that although financial help could stand developing nations in good stead to some extent, other practical aid and advice are by far the most effective ways.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: whether; the question whether
It is true that the question of whether global relief would be effective if mul...
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Suggestion:
...n finjancial one. It is fair to say that those developing countries have been suf...
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Suggestion: of the latest
... extensive farming method and operation of latest technology, voluntary teachers could al...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in other words, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52491694352 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13758838567 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617940199336 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.7211149448 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.181818182 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3636363636 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.4545454545 7.06120827912 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168364313847 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.067078748734 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604971359561 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120452612803 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0663064881445 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.12 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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