Some people think that family life and parents have great influence on children s development while others consider that external influence plays a more important role in children s life discuss both views and give your own opinion | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some people think that family life and parents have great influence on children’s development, while others consider that external influence plays a more important role in children’s life, discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Plethora of folks ruminate that family is the prevail in the development of a child ,while other think that in today's paradigm, childrens are influenced by tv ,comrades,internet and manymore.In my prospective youngster's are more effected by their friend and social media.This essay will examine the both the statements out forward by proponent and my opinion too .

To begin with ,there are multifarious ways in which both the spouse but the most fundamental one is teaching moral and ethics to them subsequently,they inculcate knacks like how to obey yhier elders , discipline and also eliminate the grey area.and they ought to involve in umpteen acitivies such as charity, voluntary works etcetera .Moreover,parents can bring a holistic development of their ward ,as reagrd to their physical enlargement they can pursue outdoor activities which develop their motor traits and and enhance their fitness level ,as regard to their mental development they can advocate how to overcome the obstacles by dealing with them and try to strengthen their bond.

However,moving towards second evidence which is quite convening,one of most significant reason of being negative influence is social media , tv ectetera because young ones are so fascinated with celebrities and try to copy their way of living and actions and implement such acts in their life without knowing it's consequences which made them anti-social and carcky in nature. Apart from that,peer pressure of their friend circle as they want to prove them cool they might engaged in some wrong matrics,also sometimes they get good knowledge from their friends like some people a good leader and motivator for an individual.To examplify ,it is surveyed by article in 'times of India 'that teenagers and children's are influenced and mold themselves according to their surroundings.

In conclusion ,although,both the option have eradicate grounds but according to me genuinely children's are influend by tv . internet because they inception things implementating in their real life by viewing actors ..and live in a virtual reality.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, while, apart from, in conclusion, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1761.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43518518519 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09935941406 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626543209877 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 54.0 20.2975951904 266% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 191.881401449 49.4020404114 388% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 293.5 106.682146367 275% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 54.0 20.7667163134 260% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.0 7.06120827912 255% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 41.0 5.01903807615 817% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150718302475 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0875228054226 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522428965702 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109712761838 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592347012411 0.056905535591 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.2 13.0946893788 238% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 8.21 50.2224549098 16% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.44779559118 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.5 11.3001002004 226% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.16 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.33 8.58950901804 132% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 9.78957915832 296% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 23.6 10.1190380762 233% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, while, apart from, in conclusion, such as, to begin with

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