Some people think that good health is a basic human need, so the medical service should not be run by profit-making companies. Do you think the disadvantages of private health care outweigh the advantages?

Essay topics:

Some people think that good health is a basic human need, so the medical service should not be run by profit-making companies. Do you think the disadvantages of private health care outweigh the advantages?

It is true that the question of whether the health care services run by private companies bring more benefits or more drawbacks remains controversy. In my opinion, I believe that the disadvantages of this outweigh its advantages.

On the one hand, an increasing number of benefits are gained from private health care. The first one could be that if citizens living in the city take out private health insurance, they will be offered comprehensively primary health care services. As a result, urban residents would have the good health and annual mortal rate would be reduced gradually. From making-profit companies perspective, they will be more likely to have motivations to carry out some facility improvements such as superseding the old-fashion machines by new and more advanced ones. If private corporations do not accept facility changes, they will be more likely to lost competitive edge. This leads to the fact that making-profit enterprises easily fail to account for most market share in the medical field.

On the other hand, despite some advantages expressed above, running medical services by private companies pose a threat to both national authorities and citizens. From the national leader perspective, it is difficult for government to keep profit-making companies under control strictly, encouraging those companies which concentrate on profit to make use of power generated by self-proclaimed medical service corporations to raise profit by selling illegal drugs. Consequently, this leads to some deteriorations in some aspects of society such as crime, drug addiction. If medical services are managed by making-profit companies, an enormous number of residents will be less likely to afford these services. Therefore, the citizens’ living standard will be undermined gradually, leading gross domestic product of nation to reduction.

In conclusion, medical services run by private companies bring more negative impacts than positive ones. Therefore, authorities should control health services by themselves and not allow any companies to manage.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
It is true that the question of whether the health care services run by private...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, so, therefore, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1774.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.66773162939 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11579739523 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565495207668 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9820546314 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.266666667 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8666666667 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.06666666667 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321458572648 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106366068041 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410852672921 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190942099579 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246487423196 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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