Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?
In the modern world, there is a wide held belief that there is financial wastage on the arts, and instead of that, the authority should invest this fund in other fields. I am against this idea owing to the following grounds.
To begin with, the compelling justification for refuting the aforesaid position is that art is a contributory factor in comprehensive education. In other words, art reflects the heritage of a country and depicts an individual's creativity. Without works of art, future generations can lose significant knowledge sources and hardly access national culture and history. Take Vietnam for example, numerous works of art were destroyed because of wars in this country, so it is not easy to study history and culture in some previous periods. Furthermore, several valuable lessons from the arts show the creator's viewpoint about some significant social issues such as national unity, harmony, peace, and gender-equal. Therefore, the government should allocate the budget to preserve and develop arts.
Another reason as to why the standpoint should be opposed is the national income source from arts. This is to say that arts are part of the culture and over time become the identity of a nation; eventually, arts could be a major of income. To illustrate, Bali is an island in Indonesia, where an increasing number of visitors come annually to experience the combination of conventional values and modern lifestyles. As a consequence, the governments in Indonesia invest more than a third of their budget in maintaining its traditional arts, which returns the country's profits from tourists.
In conclusion, I cannot agree that the government is wasting money on the arts because I believe arts are vital for a nation's development process.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 215, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...he heritage of a country and depicts an individuals creativity. Without works of art, futur...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 597, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'creators'' or 'creator's'?
Suggestion: creators'; creator's
...valuable lessons from the arts show the creators viewpoint about some significant social...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 119, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
... because I believe arts are vital for a nations development process.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, third, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21478873239 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93300136795 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609154929577 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8999627325 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.923076923 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8461538462 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2023453223 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065839149556 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579493349846 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127480349579 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483440396128 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 215, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...he heritage of a country and depicts an individuals creativity. Without works of art, futur...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 597, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'creators'' or 'creator's'?
Suggestion: creators'; creator's
...valuable lessons from the arts show the creators viewpoint about some significant social...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 119, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
... because I believe arts are vital for a nations development process.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, third, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21478873239 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93300136795 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609154929577 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8999627325 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.923076923 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8461538462 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2023453223 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065839149556 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579493349846 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127480349579 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483440396128 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.