Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere.
To what extent do you agree with this view?
Arguing whether the government should use money for the arts or use it for other things is a vital concern of society. Some visionaries, including the speaker, speak a world in which the spending money on the arts from the government is wast and it should be used to do other things. In this essay, I will explain the reason why I agree with the speaker’s idea with the opposite idea.
At a glance, the idea that investing of the government for the arts is useful seems reasonable. The arts are one form of cultures, so that they should be protected. People can learn the past cultures from Statues and pictures. For instance, in Japan, the government spends much money on statues of Japanese Gods and Ukiyoe, a Japanese type picture, to save them for descendants to experience Japanese old cultures. However, this investment is only reasonable only when all citizens are wealthy. In the real situation, there are some poor citizens, and so the government should use much money to rescue them, in stead of the arts.
The chief reason of my assertion is as follows: the government should spend money to save the poverties, because the main aim of the government is to mitigate the current citizen’s life, not to protect the arts. The government should make saftey nets, supplies work training programs and then support non-workers to obtain new jobs. For example, in 20 century, Japanese government constructed a safty nets system to save poor Japanese citizens, and for them, it offered work trainings and helped them to get a new occupation.
In sum, I would like to stress that speaker’s idea- the government spending on the arts is wast and it should be used for other things- is reasonable, since the purpose of the government is for its citizens to have better life. Therefore, I agree with the idea and I believe that spending money on poor people will ameliorate the country in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...oney on the arts from the government is wast and it should be used to do other thing...
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Line 3, column 609, Rule ID: IN_STEAD_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'instead of'?
Suggestion: instead of
...t should use much money to rescue them, in stead of the arts. The chief reason of my ass...
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Line 5, column 298, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...supplies work training programs and then support non-workers to obtain new jobs. ...
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Line 5, column 359, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'century' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'centuries'.
Suggestion: centuries
... to obtain new jobs. For example, in 20 century, Japanese government constructed a saft...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...them to get a new occupation. In sum, I would like to stress that speaker&apos...
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Line 7, column 98, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
... the government spending on the arts is wast and it should be used for other things-...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83890577508 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73008570332 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492401215805 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8903852996 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.714285714 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21428571429 7.06120827912 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235787808776 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898428058117 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531768284591 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165051932082 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0663153508271 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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