Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals and that this money could be better spent on the human population To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In this day and age, some individuals believe that instead of investing time and money in wild animal conservation, it could be invested in improving people’s living conditions. From my perspective, I partially agree about this statement and I believe that both areas might be spent equally.
On the one hand, it is considered that those money and time could be used for conserving wild species. Wild animals play a vital role in the ecosystem, which contributes to the sustainability of the Earth. For example, to some plant-eating animals such as Rhinoes, they can eat grasses, therefore, the large number of grasses can be decreased, which is a contributor to the low possibilities of forest fire. Besides that, they are also rich sources of minerals and nutritions for people. Not only do they provide nutrients but their meats are also necessary for the development of human. Take fishes as an example, they plays an indispensable role in the development of people, which is Vitamin D3 for human’s eyes and others essential vitamins. As a result, people’s health could be diminished if there is the loss of animals in Earth.
On the other hand, it is believed to utilize that money for improving people’s living conditions. To rural areas, it is less paid attention by governments so there is less facilities in these places, which results in the lack of amenities and low quality lving conditions. For instance, to the mountainous places such as TayNguyen, children have less chances to go to schools and donot have enough food to consume day by day. After being supportted by some organiztions, the quality living conditions has improved considerably.
In conclusion, I believe that wild animals play a fundamental role in the environment’s sustainabilies and those money and time should be spent on both animals conservation and improving people’s living quality.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 40, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this money' or 'those moneys', 'those monies'?
Suggestion: this money; those moneys; those monies
... On the one hand, it is considered that those money and time could be used for conserving w...
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Line 2, column 620, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'play'
Suggestion: play
... human. Take fishes as an example, they plays an indispensable role in the developmen...
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Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are less facilities'?
Suggestion: there are less facilities
...s less paid attention by governments so there is less facilities in these places, which results in the l...
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Line 3, column 167, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun facilities is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...id attention by governments so there is less facilities in these places, which resul...
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Line 3, column 346, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun chances is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...places such as TayNguyen, children have less chances to go to schools and donot have...
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Line 4, column 108, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this money' or 'those moneys', 'those monies'?
Suggestion: this money; those moneys; those monies
...in the environment’s sustainabilies and those money and time should be spent on both animal...
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Line 4, column 153, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
... money and time should be spent on both animals conservation and improving people’s liv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15309446254 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06713460195 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540716612378 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4537638397 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9285714286 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253743552759 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907566368506 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812247192468 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177330599308 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0915468067537 0.056905535591 161% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments