Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is commonly thought that with the fast development of electronic devices, people started communicating more through the internet and it brought people closer. However, others are of the opinion that the World Wide Web has drove people further away from each other. While I agree that it is true that the internet brought people together, I do not think that it is the internet’s fault that human beings became more isolated.
On the one hand, with the rapid increase in technology’s development, people, especially adolescants, started communicating through various web sites. In my opinion, I believe that this is an upside of the internet, because such sites made it easier for the internet users to meet new people from different cultural backgrounds and gave them an opportunity to diversify their friend group. For example, Facebook, an extremely popular social networking site, has millions of users who interact with each other daily, expressing their opinions on a broad range of topics and building communities with people who have common interests.
On the one hand, the internet has resulted in isolating its users. Internet addiction is at increasingly high rate among people, mainly teenagers. This is mainly because they have not fully developed self control and they became dependant on various gizmos. This issue resulted to people shutting themselves down from the outside world and completely isolating themselves from their family and community. For instance, people spend hours on their laptops and mobile phones because of their internet addiction.
However, I do not agree that it is the internet’s fault, since most of the people chose to use their electronic devices and substitute real communication with online conversations. I believe that people should learn self control and seek help from their friends and family, if needed.
In conclusion, with the dramatical rise in the internet’s development, it brought a number of advantages and disadvanatges to the society. Such benefits and drawbacks include bringing people together and isolating them from other human beings and communities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 226, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'driven'.
Suggestion: driven
...the opinion that the World Wide Web has drove people further away from each other. Wh...
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Line 5, column 230, Rule ID: DEPENDENT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'dependent' on?
Suggestion: dependent
... developed self control and they became dependant on various gizmos. This issue resulted ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1807.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42642642643 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8560689948 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534534534535 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8100391487 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.466666667 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323145432282 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112787789227 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845682102052 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194382366926 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114941937127 0.056905535591 202% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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