Some people think that it is best for extended families to live together. Other people think that it is best for the nuclear family to live away from the extended family. Which one do you prefer?
Marriage will create a dilemma for a young spouse as well as those who have already had a child. When more factors are thought, the decision for internal family matters will be convoluted, no exception with the living choice; whether to live together or individually without the extended family. I would like to elaborate my point of view favouring having an individual place of living is the best choice.
Many people underline that the financial efficiency of living with a whole family is a significant contributor to this choice. They apparently assume to save more money as they do not have to spend their expenditure for buying or renting a house; this case applies to those who live in their parent’s house and their parents pay for all maintenance fee. By this approach, they could allocate the money for other positive purposes, such as investment.
However, I am bringing two primary disadvantages adhered to living with a big family. The first relates to privacy where the boundary limitation between families will be obscure, thus implicating the core family secrets. For example, if there is an internal conflict, the whole family will know it. I am personally against it since the internal conflict has to be private. Therefore, one of the best ways is to live in a personal house with our children and wife.
Secondly, the downside pertains to freedom; it is believed as one of the cardinal pursuits in life. Similar to the privacy matter, if we reside with our big family, our freedom will be contained as more people live in the same house. Analogically, the more persons live together, the more interests we have to take into account. Consequently, the absence of this consideration will arouse inevitable conflicts and this situation will be challenging to create a placid and enjoyable ambience.
To sum up, I agree that the conjugal family is best to live separately from the extended family. The benefits of this living fashion can be more advantageous and compensate for its downside. I also regard that the downside mentioned earlier is only about material that is, at least for me, not everything. Some more important matters should be emphasized, such as mental healthiness to be reached through better freedom and privacy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, consequently, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, at least, for example, such as, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1882.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 376.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00531914894 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78188946736 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563829787234 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5541635729 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0526315789 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7894736842 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52631578947 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292869152503 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0908104749371 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758857983349 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16744342182 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537055527464 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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