Some people think it is more important for the government to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people argue that the government should allocate more public budget to encouraging people to live healthily. While this would raise the public health, I disagree with the idea that this is a higher priority than the treatment of sufferers from illness.
It is apparent that the promotion of healthy lifestyle benefits both citizens and the government. First, merely by participating in the healthy living program do people reduce significantly the risk of developing several illnesses such as flu and obesity. The programme is increasingly important to promote people when nowadays they are so caught up in the pressure of work or study that they neglect the importance of keeping fit. Second, the public money spending on treatment of patients will be reduced since the programme decreases the number of people suffering from illness, ultimately resulting in lessening the burden on the government budget in the long run.
However, in the process of decision-making on health master, I would argue that public budget is advised to spend first on the treatment of people already being ill. It seems to be more equitable to invest considerably in health care system to cure patients of disease in which unhealthy lifestyle is not a cause. For example, people contracting some form of cancer developing as a consequence of polluted environment need to be treated in an advanced health system. Additionally, Thanks to financial support from the government, apart from curing patients, scientists can also research new medical inventions to treat or prevent serious diseases. It is more practical in the current situation where people are struggling to find against antibiotic-resistant bacteria.
In conclusion, while promoting healthy living is important, treatment must have priority in health service spending.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, while, apart from, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1537.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41197183099 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03220129502 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602112676056 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9292321407 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.083333333 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343883543683 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111817281236 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606564224757 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184384588645 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675148375436 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.