Some people think that it is more important to spend public money on promoting healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
One of the responsibilities of the national government is to maintain the well-being of its citizens. Some people argue that public funds should be allocated to promote healthy lifestyle rather than treat the illness. I hold a neutral opinion as I believe equal value should be placed on both sides.
There is no doubt that the country and the residents could derive benefits from the advocation of healthy lifestyle. First of all, it reduces the expenditure of medical services. With the savings of public funds being allocated to the other industrial sectors such as manufacture industry and agriculture, the local economy can expect to achieve an exponential growth. In addition, promoting healthy lifestyle among people helps to cultivate a healthy next generation. One piece of research conducted in the USA reveals that the average health condition of children in America has improved significantly in recent year because of the healthy living habits fostered by American families.
Nevertheless, the importance of treating those who are already ill also cannot be underestimated. To begin with, allocating public money in medical care area improves people’s confidence in the government to maintain a secure and stable societal regime. This is because through devising appropriate treatments to the diseases such as asthma and diabetes, the capability of the local authorities could be approved by their people. Moreover, providing suitable treatment to sick people can improve their life expectancy, which assists them realising a fulfilled and desired life. If the sickness people are not able to acquire adequate medical services, they will generate a sense of aversion towards the government.
In conclusion, I believe both promoting a healthy living habit and providing effective medical treatments to the public are vital to sustaining the well-being of society and individuals.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No flaws found. You are improved.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 292 350
No. of Characters: 1573 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.134 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.387 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.893 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.599 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.319 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.53 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.038 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, well, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, first of all, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51369863014 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00965637999 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619863013699 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.443268125 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8571428571 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92857142857 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203775429706 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672588974368 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701534420921 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116743039866 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025929177946 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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