Space travel has been possible for some time and some people believe that space tourism could be developed in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
It is true that the ever advanced technology has been enabling people to travel to outer space. Many people claim that the development of space tourism will be the next trend. I firmly believe such development is beneficial.
There is no doubt that both governments and individuals could derive many benefits from developing space tourism. First of all, it fuels economic growth. As space traveling is regarded as an innovative and interesting travel pattern, the promotion of it will definitely attract large amounts of people, thereby catalyzing the economic development. In addition, relative innovations will be designed and produced associated with the development of space traveling, providing people with a high quality life. For instance, the memory foam pillows, which was invented to satisfy astronauts’ requirement, are now extensively used in people’s daily life, especially for those who suffer from spine or respiratory diseases.
Admittedly, the development of space tourism also possesses some drawbacks. In particular, the alarmingly fast rate at which it consumes precious fossil fuels may lead to power shortage, imposing a threat to those energy-dependent countries such as Japan and China. Nevertheless, this problem would be effectively alleviated if renewable energies such as solar and nuclear power were widely used around the nations. Thereby, it is unreasonable to say that developing space tourism is detrimental to the development of countries.
In conclusion, although developing space traveling may cause power shortage problem to some countries at this stage, the problem can be efficiently solved by using alternative energy resources. Thus, I am in support of the idea that developing space traveling is a totally positive trend.
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Essay evaluation report
the promotion of it will definitely attract large amounts of people
the promotion of it will definitely attracts large amounts of people
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flaws:
The structure is not perfect. the better way:
paragraph 1: introduction //you OK
paragraph 2: Admittedly, ...negative of space travel. first, reason one,....second, reason two...//put two reasons here. not only one.
paragraph 2: However, I still support space travel. then talk about positive of space travel. first, reason one,....second, reason two... //put the side you support in this paragraph.
paragraph 2: conclusion.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 268 350
No. of Characters: 1461 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.046 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.451 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.983 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.845 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.557 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.059 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, nevertheless, so, thus, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in particular, no doubt, such as, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1511.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.63805970149 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15629076909 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623134328358 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1538066386 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.928571429 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1428571429 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4285714286 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407140616743 0.244688304435 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148930345487 0.084324248473 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0981207024773 0.0667982634062 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257882181331 0.151304729494 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568463617454 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.43 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.88 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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