In some countries today, people are having their first child when they are older. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that an increasing number of people choose to bear their first child later. This essay will discuss the causes of this phenomenon and argues that it possesses more benefits to both individuals and society.
The reluctance of people to have their children early mainly caused by two reasons. First of all, the ever intensified competition among employees impedes their willingness to be young parents. As individuals need to devote all their energy and time to secure a position in their workplace, it is unlikely for them to have enough spare time to bear and raise a child. In addition, the enhanced social equality acts as another vital reason. This is because women are promised with the same rights as men have that they can work or study based on their own willingness, resulting in the reduced possibility for them to have their children in early age.
As for its influences, there is no doubt that both people and nations could derive more benefits from bearing children late. To begin with, without the need to look after a baby, people are able to pursue their desired lifestyles, such as travelling around the world or receiving a higher education, which increases their satisfaction towards their life. Moreover, governments can expect to spend cut on financial assistance to those families who have young children to raise. If the public funds can be allocated to the areas that stimulate the economic growth directly, for instance, the manufacturing industry and agriculture sector, the nation will achieve an accelerated development of its economy.
In conclusion, the fierce competition among individuals and improved social equality are two vital reasons that decrease people’s will to have a child, while this development is associated with more advantages.
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Essay evaluation report
The reluctance of people to have their children early mainly caused by two reasons.
Description: what is the verb for this sentence? can you re-write this sentence?
This is because women are promised with the same rights as men have that they can work or study based on their own willingness, resulting in the reduced possibility for them to have their children in early age.
Description: 'them' and 'they' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 291 350
No. of Characters: 1465 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.13 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.034 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.668 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.284 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.564 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.05 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, moreover, so, while, as for, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, first of all, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1505.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17182130584 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77689172345 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587628865979 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8536131951 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.416666667 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1666666667 7.06120827912 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27873389681 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0975235206455 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515585876834 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177075464909 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452153080119 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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