The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the energy utilisation in American from 1980 to this year and its prediction until 2030. The data is measured by quadrillion (q.) units.
Overall, besides hydropower, which is projected to remain its figure, other five energy resources experienced and will experience an upward trend. Among these energy resources, petrol and oil accounts for the largest consumption while hydropower represents the least usage amount.
To be more specific, 35 q. units petrol and oil was used in 1980, and then it fluctuated before rising to today’s amount at just over 40 q. It is predicted that petrol and oil will preserve its dominant position and reach at 50 q. in 2030. Natural gas was the second popular energy resource in 1980. However, its place is expected to be taken by coal, whose consumption began at about half amount of that from petrol and oil. After 2015, the consumption of natural gas will level off at 25 q., while coal will gradually increase its amount to just over 30 q.
As for other three energy producer, they all started at 4 q. in 1980. Even though both experienced a moderate growth, Americans consumed and will consume slightly more nuclear than solar/wind. Nevertheless, hydropower is expected to stable at its initial figure in the measured period.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
The line chart illustrates the energy utilisation in American from 1980 to this year
description: 'to this year' means which year? not to make something new.
better one:
The graph shows consumption of energy in the U.S. since 1980 with projections through 2030.
Also need more comparisons for natural gas and coal.
read a sample. Read it carefully at least 10 times. It has a lot of good sentences which can be used in your future essays:
https://www.testbig.com/ielts-writing-task-i-ielts-academic-essays/grap…
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 218 200
No. of Characters: 1040 1000
No. of Different Words: 129 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.843 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.771 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.61 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 74 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 50 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.934 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.624 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.063 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 27, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'producer' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'producers'.
Suggestion: producers
...t over 30 q. As for other three energy producer, they all started at 4 q. in 1980. Even...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, then, while, as for
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1084.0 965.302439024 112% => OK
No of words: 217.0 196.424390244 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99539170507 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70230037533 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 106.607317073 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617511520737 0.547539520022 113% => OK
syllable_count: 327.6 283.868780488 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.2233226365 43.030603864 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.3846153846 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6923076923 22.9334400587 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 5.23603664747 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101517075678 0.215688989381 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046946692811 0.103423049105 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487717220808 0.0843802449381 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0703078791011 0.15604864568 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323869422814 0.0819641961636 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 61.2550243902 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.3012195122 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 40.7170731707 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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