The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the composition of the populations grouped by ages in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and its predictions for 2050. Overall, it can be seen that Yemen’s population is mainly constituted by adolescents and working-age people, while adults and seniors are the biggest population in Italy.
First of all, in Yemen, the population was almost equally divided by young people (50%) and working forces (46.3%) in 2000. Retired-age people only make up to 3.6% in that year. However, this composition is predicted to change in 2050 by working-age people will gradually rise its proportion to 57.3%, bypassing adolescents becoming the largest population group. On the contrary, the figure of juveniles will decrease to 37%, while aged people will remain the minimum portion with 5.7%.
As for Italy, its population was primarily made up by residents who were 15-59 years old in 2000 (61.6%). Teenagers and seniors simply contributed 24.1% and 14.3% respectively. Nevertheless, unlike its counterparts in Yemen, Italy’s population is expected to rely more on elders, which will account for 42.3%, and working forces whose rate is projected to 46.2%. Young people also will slightly decrease its share to 11.5% after 50 years.
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this composition is predicted to change in 2050 by working-age people will gradually rise its proportion to 57.3%,
this composition is predicted to change in 2050 by working-age people who will gradually rise its proportion to 57.3%, //if not, two verbs: 'is, will'
flaws:
'adolescents', 'juveniles' and 'Young people' are not equal. We can only say '0-14 years'.
'Retired-age people', or 'aged people' doesn't mean 60+ years either.
so this is a wrong conclusion:
Overall, it can be seen that Yemen’s population is mainly constituted by adolescents and working-age people, while adults and seniors are the biggest population in Italy.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 10
No. of Words: 197 200
No. of Characters: 993 1000
No. of Different Words: 120 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.746 4.0
Average Word Length: 5.041 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.781 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 70 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 52 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 36 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.7 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.589 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.398 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.568 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.055 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, nevertheless, so, while, as for, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 1.00243902439 599% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1044.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 197.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29949238579 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87536456903 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 106.607317073 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634517766497 0.547539520022 116% => OK
syllable_count: 307.8 283.868780488 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.3038875258 43.030603864 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.4 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.9 5.23603664747 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209229625536 0.215688989381 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887784178597 0.103423049105 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0782275293875 0.0843802449381 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162502730038 0.15604864568 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721815415342 0.0819641961636 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 61.2550243902 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 11.4140731707 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.06136585366 110% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 40.7170731707 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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