The pie charts below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the percentage breakdown of residents in Australia frequently participating in physical exercise grouped by age and gender in 2010. Overall, more males than females engaged in such activities regularly when they were 15-24 years old and this trend reversed after people were older than 24.
First of all, in 2010, over than half of male residents between 15 and 24 years old doing regular athletic activity in Australia. This rate witnessed a steady decrease to the bottom of 39.5% in the following two age groups before bouncing back to 43.1% in 45 to 54 age group. Thereafter, it experienced a moderate increase and ended up at 46.7% when men were 65 plus.
As for females, the initial proportion started at 47.7%, which were slightly less than that in the male group. However, this ratio exceeded its counterpart in men at 48.9% in 25 to 34 age group, and a gradual growth could be viewed in the next two groups. After peaking at 53.3%, the percentage of females who were frequently involved in athletic exercises slowly dropped to 47.1% in 65 plus group, which almost equal to the figure in the male group of the same age.
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The bar graph illustrates the percentage breakdown of residents in Australia frequently participating in physical exercise grouped by age and gender in 2010.
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The chart illustrates the percentage of Australians who did regular physical activity at different ages in 2010.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 10
No. of Words: 200 200
No. of Characters: 926 1000
No. of Different Words: 122 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.761 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.63 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.519 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 59 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 47 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 33 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.375 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.431 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.633 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.054 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, as for, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 957.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 200.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.785 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55635971647 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 106.607317073 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 281.7 283.868780488 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.307046927 43.030603864 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.625 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 22.9334400587 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.23603664747 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154098718557 0.215688989381 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712860582645 0.103423049105 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384053233985 0.0843802449381 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111834875999 0.15604864568 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00601810284068 0.0819641961636 7% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.2329268293 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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