The bar chart below the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The vertical chart reveals that information of representation proportion of Australian male and female in 2010 nor 15 to 65 age groups without any when gone to the attend class of corporal activity.

It is clearly seen that,in 15 to 24 boys were more activity in physical exercise 53% but also 25 to 34 age groups girls have much aware relate to boys.In addition,next age groups women was very attracted do the exercise 34 to 64.Moreover,female had increasing their fitness level day by day nor men was reducing their activity.

Moving towards,last 65 group female have nearly fallen up to comparing male group was bit down 48% as well as women have 49%.

To sum up,started boys have good proportion regarding to the girls.Then,female 25 to 65 groups have day by day raising or man had reduced activity.Thus,65 group more than same but 1 percentage different.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...very attracted do the exercise 34 to 64.Moreover,female had increasing their fitness lev...
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...e girls.Then,female 25 to 65 groups have day by day raising or man had reduced ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, thus, well, in addition, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 732.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 146.0 196.424390244 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01369863014 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.47606760199 3.73543355544 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18658080731 2.65546596893 120% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.657534246575 0.547539520022 120% => OK
syllable_count: 217.8 283.868780488 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 22.4926829268 160% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.4327274096 43.030603864 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 183.0 112.824112599 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.5 22.9334400587 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 23.0 5.23603664747 439% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 1.69756097561 825% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141482840051 0.215688989381 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0889842150279 0.103423049105 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350218254507 0.0843802449381 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0889842150279 0.15604864568 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350218254507 0.0819641961636 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 13.2329268293 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 61.2550243902 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.3012195122 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.06136585366 114% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.9970731707 149% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.0658536585 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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