The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates how much time the UK residents spend on three types of phone call over a seven-year period from 1995. Ther figures are measured by billion minutes.
Overall, the residents in UK spent the most of their time on local-fixed line call, while mobiles occupied the least time of English people. However, besides local-fixed line call, other two categories of phone call witnessed an upward trend throughout the surveyed period.
To be more specific, local-fixed line call started its data at 70 billion minutes in 1995. It experienced a steady increase to its peak at 90 billion in the following five years before stably dropping back to its initial figure in 2002.
However, as for other two types of phone call, national and international fixed line gradually rose from about 35 billion to 60 billion during the measured period, whilst the mobiles began at a low number (nearly 5 billion) in 1995 and doubled its data in 1999. After that, it dramatically grew to about 40 billion 2002, approximately eight times higher than its original statistic.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. seems you have issues on 'besides':
'besides local-fixed line call, other two categories of phone call witnessed an upward trend throughout the surveyed period.'
better to use 'except'. Except serves the purpose of exclusion while besides serves that of inclusion.
Suppose John is in a class of 30 students. If the other 29 students are going to the zoo but John is not, we say
The whole class is going, except John.
Now suppose Mary from another class is also going to the zoo. Then we say
Besides the class, Mary is also going.
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2. another issue is that the summary paragraph (second paragraph) is somehow duplicated to the third, fourth paragraph.We see this issue in other of your essays. look at the word 'however'. it has the same structure and appeared two times. You may remove this summary paragraph in the future essays and put the summary inside other two paragraphs. this will look better:
The bar chart illustrates how much time the UK residents spend on three types of phone call over a seven-year period from 1995. The figures are measured by billion minutes.
The residents in UK spent the most of their time on local-fixed line call which started its data at 70 billion minutes in 1995. It experienced a steady increase to its peak at 90 billion in the following five years before stably dropping back to its initial figure in 2002.
However, other two categories of phone call witnessed an upward trend throughout the surveyed period . National and international fixed line gradually rose from about 35 billion to 60 billion during the measured period, whilst the mobiles began at a low number (nearly 5 billion) in 1995 and doubled its data in 1999. After that, it dramatically grew to about 40 billion 2002, approximately eight times higher than its original statistic.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 10
No. of Words: 179 200
No. of Characters: 869 1000
No. of Different Words: 113 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.658 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.855 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.585 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 60 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 46 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 26 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 17 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.499 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.375 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.458 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.729 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, while, as for
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 895.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 179.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62736188832 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 106.607317073 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.648044692737 0.547539520022 118% => OK
syllable_count: 272.7 283.868780488 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8589263001 43.030603864 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.875 112.824112599 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 22.9334400587 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.23603664747 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168465972873 0.215688989381 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0777894082561 0.103423049105 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416314344951 0.0843802449381 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110168200066 0.15604864568 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372624004861 0.0819641961636 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 61.2550243902 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 11.4140731707 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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