The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts compare the differences of annual expenditure in a particular English school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.Overall, a considerable amount of money was used for paying teachers while the insurance constituted the least portion of total expenses throughout the surveyed period.
First of all, in 1981, teachers’ salaries were the highest spending as it accounted for 40% of the total. Other workers’ salaries took the second place by making up 28%, almost twice times more than that on resources and furniture and equipment, which both equally constituted 15%. The most insignificant cost was insurance, only representing 2% in that year.
In the following decades, the expenditure on teachers’ salary continually played the major role by first increased its proportion to 50% in 1991 and then slightly decreased to 45% in 2001. A similar trend was also experienced by the rate of resources (e.g. books) with the ended up at 9% in 2001. By contrast, an opposite trend was showed in the category of furniture and equipment for it eventually grew to 23% after 20 years. Moreover, the portion of other workers’ salary almost halved its share to 15% while insurance costs quadrupled to 8% in the same period.
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almost twice times
almost two times
by first increased its proportion to 50% in 1991 and then slightly decreased to 45% in 2001.
by first increasing its proportion to 50% in 1991 and then slightly decreasing to 45% in 2001.
A similar trend was also experienced by the rate of resources (e.g. books) with the ended up at 9% in 2001.
A similar trend was also experienced by the rate of resources (e.g. books) with the end up at 9% in 2001.
A similar trend was also experienced by the rate of resources (e.g. books) that ended up at 9% in 2001.
an opposite trend was showed in the category of furniture and equipment for it eventually grew to 23% after 20 years.
an opposite trend was showed in the category of furniture and equipment because/while it eventually grew to 23% after 20 years.
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flaws:
the structure used may cause duplication, look:
Overall, a considerable amount of money was used for paying teachers while the insurance constituted the least portion of total expenses throughout the surveyed period.
First of all, in 1981, teachers’ salaries were the highest spending as it accounted for 40% of the total.....
In the following decades, the expenditure on teachers’ salary continually ...
teachers salary and other categories are repeated 3 times.
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better to finish one category in one time, like this one:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 10
No. of Words: 202 200
No. of Characters: 979 1000
No. of Different Words: 128 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.77 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.847 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.788 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 68 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 52 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.175 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.393 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.604 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.044 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Overall
...r English school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.Overall, a considerable amount of money was use...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, e.g., first, if, moreover, second, so, then, while, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1038.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 201.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16417910448 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04964979176 2.65546596893 115% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 106.607317073 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.63184079602 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 307.8 283.868780488 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.6766254277 43.030603864 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.75 112.824112599 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.125 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 5.23603664747 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11757133689 0.215688989381 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446130915409 0.103423049105 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515212521741 0.0843802449381 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0888789220728 0.15604864568 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579158877787 0.0819641961636 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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