Some people think it is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment for people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In contemporary society, a multitude of people are overwhelmingly busy with career progression and the pursuit of aspirational triumphs, as a result, people ignore the importance of healthy and balanced lifestyles serving as to a prominent role in the pathway to achieving success. Personally, I absolutely agree with the idea of state subsidies for raising awareness of health issue to prevent afflictions than for medical treatments to patients
On the one hand, the prevention of illness is more likely to be beneficial and effective for people. From my personal sentiment, If people do not do moderate and regular exercises as well as have dietary balance, they can meet some health issues, to be specific,many children have a penchant for eating food obtaining a high level of sugar so that it accumulated gradually in their body that could lead to high blood pressure or diabetes, besides, the busy works of people such businessmen, engineers or also students make them have no relaxing and free time to play sports or do exercises, consequently, they become overweight and also be in peril of facing diseases. This means that awareness of the importance of healthy lifestyles could not only keep people fit and mitigate the risk of disease so as to improve and prolong spam of their life.
On the other hand, I am firmly convinced that it is pointless to cure for patients in terminal life. For instance, when patients face malignant cancer or non-curable diseases and more medications or medical treatments in attempts to prolong in their life that is useless and expensive as they will pay much money on drugs and undergoing operations with a purpose of saving themselves and their expectations are not paid off. Thus, municipal and national governments should not expend much money on promoting the cure for afflictions.
In conclusion, it may seem to me that people should be aware of the essence of healthy lifestyles together with municipal and national governments should allocate the money on building up sports centres and encouraging people to do regular exercises and maintain a nutritional diet to nurture both mental and physical nourishment.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , many
... meet some health issues, to be specific,many children have a penchant for eating foo...
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...le fit and mitigate the risk of disease so as to improve and prolong spam of their life....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, if, may, so, thus, well, as to, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13597733711 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96485687632 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558073654391 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 44.0 20.2975951904 217% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 140.693316739 49.4020404114 285% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 226.625 106.682146367 212% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 44.125 20.7667163134 212% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 16.5 7.06120827912 234% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250245454688 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101216651101 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468139832155 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141379800256 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402690457756 0.056905535591 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.8 13.0946893788 189% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.82 50.2224549098 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.5 11.3001002004 181% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.42 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.29 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 19.6 10.1190380762 194% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.7795591182 186% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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